Dissilition.

[Maindric Games ©]

Name:
Dissilition.

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Made by:
Maindric Games

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Maker:
RPG Maker 2

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Characters:
Name: Landin.
Role: Main.
Gender: Male.
Age: 22
Background: As he was a kid, he always wanted to fight for his country in war. At the age of 15, he got his wish, he was old enough to join the army. He trained hard and long, trying to make it to the top. He always kept in touch with Kansiden, his general, earning his respect. At 16, he was to take his general's place, and lead his part of the military to war. But, during his time taking the general's oath, the emperor was murdered. He was framed for murder, and sent to death. Now, he escaped from prison, and is now seeking revenge on the one who destroyed his life.

Name: Emperor (His name is in the game, but not on top of my head right now.)
Age: 52
Role: Masakew Emperor that died.
Background: Was the Emperor of Masakew till his assassination.
The people of Masakew liked him as the Emperor. His wife died 2 years ago, due to child birth. The day his only son was born, who is to take the throne when he becomes of age, leading the Masakew empire to its fifth generation in the family.

More to come later.

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Story Line:
It has been 6 years that I lived in this hell. You see, I have been framed, of killing the emperor of Kilinden, I may have only been 16 at the time, but those guards do not let off lightly. They originally sent me to death, which was to happen 3 days from now, but, I have escaped, and ready to put the man that sent me to hell shall pay.


*Memory of court day* The room thundered with their angered words, wanting me dead. As the judge silenced the crowd, I was able to say my part of the story, to let everyone know what happened.

I was being told that I was to be sent to war. Our nation of Masakew was attacking the nation of Farmane. We have received reports that they were sending an assassin to kill the emperor. So, we decided to attack before they got that chance. He told me, that he has been given reports that I was the best, young soldier out there.

I was to be sent to the war a general. One of the five, leading a fifth of the army. You see, our army strategy is to set up the army into fifths, where each general leads part of it. They set up meetings where they discuss what they SHOULD do next, but they have to make the better judgment on the battle Field. Each of the five segments hold tens of thousands of men, making them powerful, and deadly. Well, my general is getting to old to
continue with his job, and he chose a successor, and it was me.

But the emperor was the one needed to approve my position as general, seeing how much power each one had. At first, he was a little skeptical about making the general 16 years old, but he made it so. But, as I was taking my oath, sword in hand, held up straight in front of my eyes, I felt an odd feeling. My spine was tingling, and stung, made a very recognizable feeling. I was paralyzed, unable to move, I blacked out. I had no awareness of what was going on around me.

As I regained sight, and awareness, I saw blood, as a blood stained sword sat in my hand. The emperor dead in front of me, his personal guards laying dead around him. Guards came rushing into the room, swords out. I went to my knees, hoping they may listen to me. They arrested me. Sent me to a judge, this is where I am now.

The judge, sentenced me to death. But, he said that there may have been some truth in my story, there was no way to tell if I was telling the truth. Everything was pointing to me, so I had to be the one who dies for this. But now, I have gotten out, and I shall kill him. How will I be able to tell who it is? Trust me, I will be able to know.

I shall submit it in sections for my own angered reasons.

More to come later.

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Land:
Name: Kilinden.
Reason of existence: The name of the Continent, Where the game starts out.
More to come later.

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Monsters:
I have to see the models.

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Items:
I shall type down later.

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Features:
A title screen.
Working on more now.

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Any other info:
To be stated later.

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Working on:
First cut-scene.

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Memory Left:
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Well, I made ALOT of changes to the story when I first made it. What I put here is what it stays (Unless I can get better ideas from people.) Last update was the origional post.

[Neo Samurai]

The story has a lot of potential, but make sure there's more to it than just "him being framed" because that's pretty cliched by itself. But you have a good ground to start on here. Good luck.

[Maindric Games ©]

Well, I actually got to work on it today at school, and I shall type it down after I do everything I am supposed to do. You shall see 3-4 more paragraphs worth of info soon.

~~Edit~~

Updated, added about 5-6 paragraphs to it. 0.o

[Deleted]

I see: you only had the first paragraph up for a while. Well, I didn't see it until now, and it's become quite good and has a lot of potential. I'm proud to see how much you've improved at writing.

For now, just one tip...

This paragraph should all be in the past tense:
"I was to be sent to the war a general. One of the five, leading a fifth of the army. You see, our army strategy is to set up the army into fifths, where each general leads part of it. They set up meetings where they discuss what they SHOULD do next, but they have to make the better judgment on the battle Field. Each of the five segments hold tens of thousands of men, making them powerful, and deadly. Well, my general is getting to old to
continue with his job, and is finding a replacement, and he chose me."
(A better word might be successor, too, instead of replacement)

And I'll be glad to help more if you'd like too, but I'm worried you might not like it. I know I went a little overboard last time. Oh well... It's entirely up to you!

[Maindric Games ©]

Is that better? =D I am getting complements, YAY! ^^ I am going to have to work on my main characters soon... I may do that tonight..

[Neo Samurai]

Wow, that looks good.

I really have no suggestions to make. I'm looking forward to playing it.

[Maindric Games ©]

If you can get to play it... I do not have a Max Drive.... Also, it will be pretty basic seeing as I am still not to good... At scripting that is.

[Neo Samurai]

Well, you can always practice fooling around with the scripts before you begin really working on this game. You might want to begin the game right away, but investing your time into improving your scripting abilities is well worth it.

[Maindric Games ©]

I know, but when I try to mess around, nothing happens. Just one time, I made it so I cannot die, but that was about it... The only way for me to learn things like this is for me to see/read something that tells me basically what it does. Then, for me to make something off of it, and make it work. Otherwise, I am just stuck...

~~Edit~~

Oh, and I also updated the main character's story.

[Deleted]

I'll second that notion.

Just go through Doan's World Creation Guide.
Then Doyleman's Scripting Tutorial.
Then the common script database topic in the tech help forum.
Then check out some of the other guides on Doan's RPGM2 guides page.
And that should help a bunch.

Otherwise, starting with your first town place, and then doing your first cutscene could help since after that you could build up your camera, sound, and event/party movement/look/action abilities before doing your first cutscene. Maybe have townspeople where the camera zooms up closer to them, then as they speak their facial expressions change and they're more interactive than your normal run-of-the-mill townsperson. It doesn't take much complicated scripting know-how to make a good cutscene for the intro you have planned (the toughest part is warping an invisible party member to a new screen for each scene), it's more about perseverance, but it's best to build up the rest of your cutscene abilities (camera, sound, and event/party movement/look/action) first, too, before introducing the new one (warping an invisible party member to a new screen for each scene). Anywhoo, big enough paragraph about something simple for ya?

Well, good luck.

edit: Oh, a good tip for when writing stories is that 3 is the power number. Things in 3's seem more powerful and have a stronger impact, so showing 3 scenes in the past, for example, will work better than two or four. I know for sure even 'cause I had a scene in the past being told by someone in the present as my intro in my first game, just like you, and I found this to be the case. Oh well, poop out!

[Maindric Games ©]

I actually, I kind of made 80% of a cut-scene once. In my first game. So I know how to work the camera and what not. I also made it so they had a wait command turn to the walk command. (Basic even when I first tried it.) The camera, I can work with pretty well. I definitely love making the party leader invisible trick, messing with it is fun. =D Well, right now, I shall work on making the Continent, on paper for now, I already drew it, but it still needs some work. Also, I shall make my first cut scene shortly.

Here is an over look at my cut scene I am thinking of:
Scene 1:*Goes to the courtroom. (Shall be making soon.)*
Scene 1:*I start to explain.*
Scene 2:*Goes to the throne room (Already made.)*
Scene 2:*The events happen.*
Scene 3:*Goes back the court room.*
Scene 3:*The rest of the events happen.*
Is this a scene? 0.o POWER OF THREE! =D*Goes to where he is at.*

That is what my cut scene basically is. Also, I am going to have a Title Screen, which I will need to find out how to put the "Load Game" option up... Then also a "New Game" Option, which will basically just start the first cutscene... Well, that is my plan for now. What I am going to work on first is the Court Room and the Continent, where he is currently at. Then I shall make the character models for everyone it shows. Then, I shall work on the scripting and such. That is my plan, does it sound good?

[Maindric Games ©]

Well, I just got done with the Court room and the World map. So now, I just gotta make the scene, I already have it started, but I still have a bit of it left to do.

[Deleted]

Yes, yes, it most certainly does!

And you’re going with the power of three - yay! Also, the tip of being more precise and to the point, and not having excess dialogue of Final Rune's was a good one (pick and choose from his, doing all of his is impossible ), and will help your scene as you'll see when you go to make it in RPGM2, because having one BGM throughout all of it with the right mood will help, but having the BGM loop too many times will hurt.

Also, think of RPGM2 as a sort of excrutiatingly slow printer, and you're the printer that has to do all the work: you want to be certain that what you have done is your best work before starting the printing process. Do you remember in school when you would (or probably still do) write a rough draft and a final draft? Maybe for some people the two ended up being the exact same, but the idea was that you'd improve it when you re-wrote it, going from the first draft to the second. Anywhoo, I'm not saying you should do it because I think it could be better or because anyone else (maybe) does, but if you read through it again and think you can improve it, you should try to improve it before going to RPGM2 just because RPGM2 takes SO MUCH extra work compared to simply planning things on paper. I guess a good way to put it is: you have the dialogue typed up already, so you might as well get the dialogue typed up really well (the throne room design and stage directions, you won't be able to type up precisely until going to RPGM2 no matter what).

Anyways, good to hear you're making progress!

[Maindric Games ©]

williamkirk said:

Do you remember in school when you would (or probably still do) write a rough draft and a final draft? Maybe for some people the two ended up being the exact same, but the idea was that you'd improve it when you re-wrote it, going from the first draft to the second.

Usually my rough draft and final draft usually do en up the same. Except for a few word changes and some typos fixed, but that is about it.

williamkirk said:

Anyways, good to hear you're making progress!

I am making alot more progress faster then I thought I would.

But I shall make edits through out me making it. I shall just put the basic idea in the game, but at the same time, changing them. What I mean is like, right now for example. I am making my first cut-scene. I shall make it, and get it to the point I like it. Then, when all the actions work great, and they are to the point where I like them, then I shall edit my text to suit them to my likeing. But for now, it is just saying what it says in more of an, overveiw style. Then I shall put it so it sounds better. I am just working on my "rough draft" in RPGM2 right now.

[Maindric Games ©]

Updated. =D

[Maindric Games ©]

I have made a number of upgrade's/changes. And they are:
1) Changed opening cut-scene.
2) Remade world map.
3) Perfected my building system.
4) Made more towns.
5) Started a custom battle system. (I encountered a minor problem, if I can fix it, I may be able to fix it.)
6) I made someone text play it, and I got a small town almost fully done, dungeon finished, and it took him about 30 mins to finish. The dungeon was not made to be long, just to explain a bit of the story, and get the player used to the game.
7) While making adjustments, my VFX skills increased a little.
8) Made 2 different type of save spots. One just saves it, located in towns, and one that heals you, located inside of dungeons.

I made a few more, but that is just a small list, hope you like it. =D

[Doan the Nado]

It's great to see you making progress.

In regards to point number 6, more important than the time to finish was if the player enjoyed it. What kind of feedback did you get from the player?

[Maindric Games ©]

Well, he was pretty tired, and just started calling everyone fatty, soo, I think he was to tiored to pay attention...

[Deleted]

I'm glad to see you making progress too. Sounds good.