Fawleh: Pheonix Pinion

[vespuleth]

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authors note:
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all of this is a work in progress, and almost none of it is set in stone.

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intro:
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one last post, then im off to do productive stuff.

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errata
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i have not specifically decided what type of game this is to be, but i have decided what it will not be:

This is not a story about a world on the brink of apocolypse, an event that defines an age, a political infrastructure eating itself apart, some threat that looms overhead, or even heroes and villians. This is a story about a boy, his family, and his experience. because sometimes, these are the most inspirational.

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world info
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well, maybe not so much world. the world this game takes place on may or may not be seen in a very distant future, but as for now, its name will have to suffice. The story takes place on the world of 'Asthar', named after the patron diety himself. This is a world that ive spent quite a bit of time developing, over several years, and have recently come back to.

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Timeline
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I havent quite decided where Pheonix Pinion (noted as PP) falls on the timeline of Asthar quite yet, and as it does not alter any of the events that occured on Asthar that brought into the light of gamers years ago, i dont suppose it truly matters, except for setting cohesion and such. what i do know, is that PP takes place on the 'new world' of asthar, which may or may not truly be new at the tme of the story, and the world still finds itself a loose assembly of city states, small kingdoms that are no larger than what an army can travel in a day. i also know that, for whatever reason, the Kingdom of Fawleh doesnt exist at the time of the predefining moments of Asthar (which one day, you may get to enjoy), or it isnt recorded. This may be due to location, or some such other reason, or it may be because Fawleh is an ancient kingdom, now dead. Sometime, i will have to decide.

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locale
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As mentioned, PP takes place in the country of Fawleh, a small city-state nestled just below the foothills of the BayRau Mountains. It has both neighbors of diplomatic trust and tenseion. Fawleh, like most primitive kingdoms, enjoys spring battles that prove little, and ruin crops.

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Sociology, religion, and other such nonsense
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Fawleh is ruled by one king, if the term is used most liberally. so, then, the government is monarchy. this, like other monarchys, is a very selfish one, but the people enjoy the freedoms they have, and none of this really matters to our story, because boys are hardly ever involved in politics, esspecially that of kings.

the only society that needs to be known is that of Fawleh, and it is your typical serfdom. farmers, tradesman, and so forth. one large castle, a few small hamlets, and thats all there is. the people are fairly ignorant, but well protected. no one owns a weapon w/o allowance by the king, as he is paranoid, and insecure, and possibly realizes he is a bad ruler. anyways, its your typical, poor, small kingdom.

the religion, however unimportant it is to the actual game, is that of polytheism. namely, there are four higher gods (Asthar, Nolvar, Regonta, and one that i either dont quite remember or didnt name) and a plethora of lower gods (from everything to cartography to crops to luck) somewhat reminiscient of the roman or greek or indian societies. forgive me for not going into this too much, as it really doesnt matter.

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interjection
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i know all of this sounds fairly general right now, but my time is short. i hope to give you just the basic layout, and then inspire questions. so, if something interests you, ask away. if something sounds bad, suggest a change. if something needs to be expanded, well... i may at some point put the actual story on here, but what fun would that be?

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characters
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right now i only have a few characters of importance:

Jale: our protagonist, 'hero' if you will
Mina: Jale's little sister

Jale also has a mother and father, but they remain unnamed as of yet

The King (again unnamed): the ... catalyst, if you will

Duvac (think of this as under construction): a knight; think of him as a catalyst as well

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close (for now)
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well, i need to go, but i wanted to post this for now, so that you guys could kind of see whats goin through my head. later, or tomorrow, i may actually post a story/theme/premise, and some other thoughts. as it is, i know that this is pretty bare bones, but... itll get there.

[Doan the Nado]

Your world sounds pretty realistic, and if you can make us want to play a game that is not about a defining point or an important event, then it must be good. I like your character, god, and location names (so far), and I look forward to hearing more details.

[Dungeon Warden]

This is definately well thought out, but as you say, pretty barebones. I don't know how interesting this game will be as it stands. It really depends on how the story plays out. I look forward to hearing more about this game as well.

[WarDragon]

I also look forward to hear more.

[The Final Rune]

Me = dumbfounded with awe!

This sounds very promising man!

[Deleted]

Though not explained thoroughly, it seems like a good beginning. It's hard to really critique much until you post more on all of it. I do like the idea of having smaller, less grand/important stories. I do that with my side characters in the private actions and they're quite good, and an easier way to bring stories/messages from your own life into the game/characters.

[vespuleth]

i just wanted to post a quick update, since i havent said anything about this in a while, and some people are probably beginning to wonder whether or not its still in production.

so, all ive really been doing is writing the story. im somewhat sad to say that the story is becoming longer than i want it to be, and so alot of editing out will probably get done. i think im about 2/3 of the way through it, but have all of it planned. it just needs a little more fleshing out. i may, at some point, post some more info on the setting and story. I plan on making a 'commercial of sorts' when the story is completely finished, as i think that will be the best way to answer questions/create hype about the game. anyways, the entire story (spoilers included) will be available on my website when its finished.

so thats where i am. this is the game that i had said a very long time ago i was going to try to spend an hour on a day. well, i havent been able to do that due to some straining time contraints, but i have put some time into this game. i think that it will be an enjoyable story to experience, if nothing else.

[doyleman]

I look forward to playing this if you put it out .
The time though I could understand I guess, but either way, nice hearing an update on it

[The Final Rune]

We are all egarly awaiting anything on this project. Take your time, make it right and I'm sure it will blow our socks off.

No pressure, just expecting something spectacular from the man who's running this joint!